Matt Bellamy

Hi! This is interesting. I like how you started it, though I'm not sure what you meant by the last two lines of the first stanza. In the second stanza, ...

I like this, it is pretty creepy. However, the rhyming seems a little forced in places so watch out for that. Make sure that you're saying something because it's an ...

Hello! This is quite nice, I like the concept. However, I think you could improve the rhyming - some of it sounds pretty forced and obvious, or simple - past ...

I'm not sure what to make of this. Your description is good, it is pretty well written. But I'm not really sure what the main point is, or what the ...

Hi! This is a good start, but you need...more. We need to know more about who Alec is, etc. And you told us you put your slippers on, but you ...

The thing I like most about this poem is the ending. I think that if you were to put more of this image - of fire and burning, etc, perhaps ...

Haha! I love the ending of this! Actually, I started reading it thinking you were a moth. :P I think "bad" should be "badly". I like the way you said ...

I do like this! And I think a lot of people will be able to relate to it, which is great. :D I think some parts, like "oh man" and ...

I really like how this poem starts. But I'm not sure what it is, but I don't really like the bits about the pages. I don't know why. I think ...

Hello! It's very original how you have incorporated dialogue into your poem, and it works very well. I'm not sure I like the use of "he" and "she" but I'm ...

Hi! This is a sweet poem. Well, until the last couple of stanzas,which make it end of a bit of a dark note! In fact, the last two stanzas kind ...

Hi! I like the imagery you used in this poem. I suppose the colour of your eys thing is a little cliche but it was such a sweet way to ...

This is a really nice poem. I like how you picked a theme and stuck with that format all the way through. I think in places the rhyming sounds a ...

This is an interesting poem. I quite like it, though it does seem a little creepy. You have capitalised some words unnecessarily, so you need to go through and check ...

Hello! I think using a rollercoaster metaphor could have been a little cliche but you made it work because of the description you added to it, so I quite liked ...